tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8080932867609430872.post3153570084702882433..comments2011-12-26T14:07:58.345-05:00Comments on Where It Begins: Help?!Mehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00145233627508953547noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8080932867609430872.post-75926414034219125662010-12-05T19:16:53.458-05:002010-12-05T19:16:53.458-05:00Melanie- actually that helped A LOT!!
Aria-now tha...Melanie- actually that helped A LOT!!<br />Aria-now that you mention it, it does.<br />Jen- i know right!! They should all just ask us like a sentence answer, I'm really good at those :)Mehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00145233627508953547noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8080932867609430872.post-2406708710856253372010-12-04T21:26:15.311-05:002010-12-04T21:26:15.311-05:00I absolutly love your application paragraph!! I th...I absolutly love your application paragraph!! I think it's great!! It's written smoothly but says so much!! Great job!!<br />I've been writing all those stupid applications too recently :( why can't they just ask us one question and me done with it?? Lol<br />--- JenJennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03968615344327052791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8080932867609430872.post-47029097738880937412010-12-03T18:50:13.713-05:002010-12-03T18:50:13.713-05:00Your picture looks like Plank off of Ed Edd and Ed...Your picture looks like Plank off of Ed Edd and Eddy. It is isn't it!!! So cute!Ariannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13789634822460490560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8080932867609430872.post-65543413288416240572010-12-03T17:16:24.587-05:002010-12-03T17:16:24.587-05:00Hey Shannon!
Wow, that sounds like a lot! I reall...Hey Shannon! <br />Wow, that sounds like a lot! I really like the way you started it, but here's some tips. I took two years of writing classes so I'm not completely hopeless :)<br />1. Try to stop using to much "I". It makes your writing monotonous and boring to read.<br />2. Mix up the word choice. <br />3. Envision, and possibly write long term goals you may have.<br />4. Don't give the school TOO much praise. Just dish it out not so obviously.<br />5. Include personal achievements. <br />6. Include good qualities of yours. <br /><br />I hope this helped! If I think of anything else I'll definitely tell you!<br /><br />Bye!Melanie♥♥♥https://www.blogger.com/profile/05288121562593544085noreply@blogger.com